Fiction: Premonitory delusions (Delirios premonitorios) [EN/ES]
Premonitory delusions
Emily woke up overwhelmed and sat up in bed. Sweat was running hastily through every pore of her body, her straight brown hair lay on her face trying to hide her rapid breathing and dilated pupils.
She breathed again, inhaled deeply, and then released the air with the firm idea of regaining calm with every particle of oxygen that penetrated her nostrils. After a few minutes, the sobriety of reality came to her mind, she slowly stood up with the heaviness of the afternoon sun on his back.
She looked at herself in the mirror, as tall as her height, and began to comb her hair sliding the pink brush up and down, it was an act that gave her calm and tranquility, almost a hormonal pleasure. As she ran the brush through her long hair, an image of a fire appeared in the mirror, a few microseconds were enough to make Emily drop the brush as she watched with her honey-colored eyes the terrible scene.
"Emily, come downstairs and eat!". A voice from the first floor brought Emily back to her senses.
"Hey, I'm coming, Mother," the girl replied, still dazed, then rubbed her eyes profusely to regain her equilibrium of lucidity.
Hurrying downstairs to meet at the family gathering place, Emily painted a smile on her mother's candid face. "At last miss, just barely and she spends all day in bed."
"Sorry Mom, it just so happens that I couldn't sleep very well last night, I had frequent nightmares." A gesture of chagrin showed across the girl's delicate features.
Immediately Emiliy's mother put her hand to her forehead. "Some fever I notice, I'd better fix you something to drink, dear."
She would turn away and go to the refrigerator to get some lemons, cut them up, and drain them in some cold water. "Here you go honey, then go back to bed, you need your rest." A crystal glass would bring the girl closer to him with the prepared drink. "In the meantime, you rest, your father and I are going downtown to pick up the washing machine motor that was out of order."
"Nooo!" Emily's heart was pounding, and it felt like it was going to burst out of her chest.
"What's wrong, honey?"
"It's just that it's about the nightmares, I dreamed that you and Dad had an accident, and the car burst into flames." Emily let out desperate little sobs into the hot afternoon air.
"Honey, it was just a nasty nightmare, and it came from the fever." Her mother hugged her to calm the anxiety that was welling up minute by minute. "You need to get some sleep to regain your strength and good health."
"But Mom, it was so real that I got goosebumps and a terrible fear began to rise from my stomach to my throat." Her sobs were gaining strength as the time to leave approached.
"Daughter, Daughter, calm down, nothing is going to happen to us, they were just nightmares. Relax and go to your room. The mother's authoritative voice boomed in Emily's eardrums.
At that moment the father came downstairs, very calm and whistling an old rock song. He would pause before the two women, and expectantly ask, "What's wrong with my two loves?"
At that moment, the mother was telling the father about Emily's bad time, he hugged her and carried her into the bedroom. "Dad, please don't leave the house today, for the love of God."
"My love, don't worry, nothing will happen to us. I promise I'll drive carefully." The father hugged his beautiful daughter tightly to cement his promise.
Emily let herself be lulled to sleep and fell into a deep sleep... Terrifying screams could be heard coming from the burning car, then everything became cloudy, at that instant she woke up again screaming and begging her parents not to go, her heart was pounding uncontrollably and she rushed down to the kitchen.
She saw no one and started screaming over and over again as echoes floated through the house. She ran to see the car and with her heart in her hand she was begging for it to be there, but the car was gone. Emily seemed to freak out in that silent house, her nerves were on edge and that horrible feeling in her stomach was like constant daggers piercing the calm lost in the nightmare. She didn't want to think anymore, she needed to keep her restless mind distracted.
He sat down on the brown leather sofa, picked up the remote control, and turned on the television. The five o'clock movie was about to end, and at that instant a breaking news. The cameras showed a car on fire and the anchorman narrated the facts with an imposing coldness, the man was talking about two lifeless bodies, on Rose Avenue.
Emily remembered that avenue appearing in her nightmares. Tears flowed hastily down the smooth and lush cheeks, the cries accompanied the saline solution in exclamations of complaint to the whitish ceiling, a cushion served as comfort for the great pain that the girl felt.
After a few minutes of heart-rending sobs and wails, Emily went back to sleep, and between dreams, she felt her mother's caresses and her father's sweet voice calling her in the distance. She opened her eyes and looked at her parents. The girl had never been so happy in her life as in that moment, she got up and hugged them with all her strength. "Dad, Mom, you don't know how happy I am, I thought something had happened to you, I watched the news and..."
Emily was interrupted by her father. "We decided to go visit your grandmother and leave the engine thing for tomorrow and we were stunned to see the horrible accident, we decided to go back and check on you."
"I thought it was you, this hunch was killing me with anguish." Emily let out a few sobs to the loving faces of her parents.
"Fortunately it wasn't like that, your father decided in time not to go to the center, as long as you were better from your fever or maybe it would have been us, this scared me to death." The mother hugged Emily, "Now, missy, take care of that 'premonitory fever', hehe... Go get some rest, honey."
The end
Delirios premonitorios
Emily despertaba abrumada, y se sentaba en la cama. El sudor corría presuroso por cada poro de su cuerpo, su lacio cabello castaño se posaba en su rostro tratando de ocultar el respirar rápido y las pupilas dilatadas.
Respiraba de nuevo, inhaló profundamente, y luego soltó el aire con la firme idea de retomar la calma con cada partícula de oxígeno que penetraba sus fosas nasales. Luego de unos minutos, la sobriedad de la realidad llegó a su mente, se levantaba lentamente con la pesadez del sol de la tarde a cuestas.
Ella se observó en el espejo, tan alto como su la estatura, y empezó a peinarse deslizando el cepillo rosa de arriba para abajo, era un acto que le producía calma y sosiego, casi un placer hormonal. Mientras pasaba el cepillo por su largo cabello, en el espejo apareció una imagen de un incendio, unos microsegundos bastaron para hacer que Emily tirará el cepillo al ver con sus ojos color miel la terrible escena.
«¡Emily, baja a comer!». Una voz proveniente del primer piso hacía volver en sí a Emily.
«¡Eh! Ya voy, madre», respondía todavía aturdida la chica, luego se sobaba profusamente los ojos para recuperar el equilibrio de lucidez.
Se apresuraba a bajar para encontrarse en el sitio de reunión de la familia, Emily pintaba una sonrisa al rostro cándido de su madre. «Por fin señorita, por poco y pasa todo el día en la cama»
«Disculpa mamá, lo que sucede es que no pude dormir muy bien anoche, tuve frecuentes pesadillas». Un gesto de desazón se mostraba por las delicadas facciones de la chica.
Su madre inmediatamente le ponía la mano en la frente. «Algo de fiebre puedo sentir, es mejor que te haga algo para tomar, cariño».
Se daba media vuelta y se dirigía al refrigerador a buscar unos limones, los cortaba y los escurría en un poco de agua fría. «Toma cariño, y luego vuelve a la cama, necesitas descansar». Un vaso de cristal le acercaba a la chica con la bebida preparada. «En tanto descansas, tu padre y yo vamos al centro a recoger el motor de la lavadora que estaba descompuesto».
«¡Nooo!». El corazón de Emily latía fuertemente, y parecía que se le iba a salir del pecho.
«¿Qué sucede, cariño?».
«Es que es respecto a las pesadillas, soñé que tú y papá tenían un accidente, y el carro se prendía en llamas». Emily soltaba pequeños sollozos desesperados ante el aire caliente de la tarde.
«Cariño, solo fue una pesadilla desagradable, y fue producto de la fiebre que está comenzando». Su madre la abrazaba para calmar la ansiedad que brotaba minuto a minuto. «Necesitas dormir un poco para recuperar fuerzas y la buena salud».
«Pero mamá, fue tan real que se me puso la piel de gallina y un miedo terrible empezó a subir de mi estómago hasta la garganta». Sus sollozos cobraban fuerza en tanto la hora de partir se aproximaba.
«Hija, Hija, cálmate, nada nos va a pasar, solo fueron pesadillas. Relájate y ve al cuarto». La voz autoritaria de la madre retumbó en los tímpanos de Emily.
En ese momento bajaba el padre, muy tranquilo y silbando una vieja canción de rock. Se detenía ante las dos mujeres, y expectante preguntaba, «¿Qué les pasa a mis dos amores?».
En ese momento, la madre le contaba al padre del mal momento que vivía Emily, él la abrazaba y la llevó hasta la habitación. «Papá, por favor, no salgan de la casa hoy, por lo que más quieran, ¡sí!».
«Mi amor, no te preocupes, nada nos pasará. Te prometo que voy a conducir con cuidado». El padre abrazaba a su bella hija fuertemente para afianzar su promesa.
Emily se dejaba arrullar y caía en un sueño profundo... Gritos aterradores se oían salir del auto en llamas, luego todo se hacía nubloso, en ese instante volvió a despertar gritando y suplicándoles a sus padres que no fueran, su corazón brincaba incontenible y bajaba presurosa hasta la cocina.
No vio a nadie, empezó a gritar una y otra vez mientras el eco retumbaba por toda la casa. Corrió a ver el auto y con el corazón en la mano suplicaba que estuviera allí, el auto no estaba. Emily parecía enloquecer en esa casa silenciosa, sus nervios estaban al límite, y esa horrible sensación en el estómago era como puñales constantes perforando la calma perdida en la pesadilla. No quería pensar más, necesitaba mantener distraída su mente alborotada.
Se sentó en el sofá de cuero café, tomó el control y encendió el televisor. La novela de las cinco ya estaba por terminar, y en ese instante una noticia de último minuto. Las cámaras mostraban un auto en llamas y el presentador narraba los acontecimientos con una frialdad imponente, el hombre hablaba de dos cuerpos sin vida, en la avenida "Rose".
Emily recordó que esa avenida aparecía en sus pesadillas. Las lágrimas fluían presurosas por las mejillas tersas y lozanas, los gritos acompañaban a la solución salina en exclamaciones de reclamo hacia el techo blanquecino, un cojín servía de consuelo ante el gran dolor que sentía la chica.
Después de unos minutos de sollozos y lamentos desgarradores, Emily volvió a dormir y entre sueños sentía las caricias de su madre y la dulce voz del padre llamándola a lo lejos. Abrió los ojos y miró a sus padres. La chica no había sido tan feliz en su vida como en ese momento, se levantó y los abrazaba con todas sus fuerzas. «Papá, mamá, no saben lo feliz que soy, pensé que les había pasado algo, mire las noticias y...».
Emily era interrumpida por su padre. «Decidimos ir a visitar a tu abuela y dejar lo del motor para mañana y vimos estupefactos el horrible accidente, decidimos volver a mirar como estabas».
«Pensé que eran ustedes, está corazonada me estaba matando de angustia». Unos sollozos dejaba escapar Emily ante los rostros cariñosos de sus padres.
«Afortunadamente no fue así, tu padre decidió en buena hora no ir al centro, en tanto estuvieras mejor de la fiebre o tal vez hubiéramos sido nosotros, esto me dio mucho miedo». La madre abrazaba a Emily. «Eso si, a cuidar esa "fiebre premonitoria", jejeje... Ve a descansar, cariño».
Fin
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¡Thanks for you reading!
You've written a story with good handling of tension, @rinconpoetico7. The fulfilment of the disturbing premonition and the parents' decision to drive the car despite the girl's warnings keep the reader very interested in the reading until the final resolution of the plot.
Thank you for taking the time to read and leaving your kind comment. It makes me happy that you liked the story.
A hugs @theinkwell.
Emily is someone who has a gift of dreaming. She is a special being.
Anyways, taking care of her fever was the best.
Thanks for passing and leaving your comment. Apparently the girl's illness saved them from certain death.
Good day.
You do a good job quickly establishing Emily's relationship with her parents and foreshadowing the accident to come with the mention of her nightmare involving their car crash. This builds suspense and emotional investment in the characters. The back-and-forth dialogue as Emily pleads with them not to go out feels realistic and heightens the tension.
I really liked your comment, thank you for those beautiful words for history, very flattered by your analysis.
Good day.
The suspense in the story was giving...I enjoyed every bit of it. It's a good thing that nothing happened Emily's parents, it was just a drea..
The story sought to generate suspense in a tragic situation. Thanks for passing and leaving your comment.
Good day.
Me alegró que tuviera un final feliz, qué bueno que los padres de Emily le hicieron caso a sus advertencias y decidieron cambiar el rumbo. Excelente historia @rinconpoetico7 🤗.
Thank you for stopping by and leaving your kind comment. I'm glad you liked the story, I actually wrote it when I had a dream about an accident.
Take care.
An excellent day.
This story keeps the reader engaged until the end. The protagonist struggles with her premonitions as she tries to convince those around her that her visions are real. Thankfully, things turned out alright. I'm left wanting to know more about why Emily is having premonitions. Does she have a special gift or some illness? Intriguing tale. Nicely done!
Thank you for leaving your kind comment, your words make me very happy and encourage me to continue sharing content.
What he was looking for was to link the girl's illness (flu) with the visions. The reader will be able to have his own point of view if it was just a delirium of fever or really a future vision. I really liked playing with those scenarios.
A hug @litguru