Fiction: The premonition (La premonición) [EN/ES]
The premonition
I watched a woman run towards me, her tears flowing from her eye sockets, her crimson mouth expelling cries of despair, her wavy black hair swaying in the summer breeze and her knee-length red dress with printed flowers flying with every step she took.
Everything seemed to go in slow motion, the pain felt in every sob exhaled through the walls of that place. Her beautiful face and her fine, symmetrical features denoted familiarity. She would come to me and take me in his arms, I would look at myself covered in blood and then a great pain would squeeze my chest.
The bombastic sound of the alarm clock made me come to my senses, I opened my eyes with a start and looked at the time, I was late for my work appointment. I grabbed my clothes, and while the clock ticked its tireless pace, the appointed time seemed to arrive relentlessly and without delay.
I hurriedly chewed the bread left over from the night before. The sun began its meridian path and some birds danced past in the blue firmament. I hurriedly ran along the cracked sidewalk and the garbage floated in the cyclical morning breeze.
I took the bus to take me to the appointment made in advance, my future in that city depended on it after having left my town and my family. Nothing has been easy since then, I had to fight hard to achieve my dream of becoming a professional and getting a well-paid job. This was the right time to get what I had worked so hard for.
Already on the bus, the smell of cheap fruity air freshener settled in my nostrils and infiltrated my mind, leading me to fall into a hypnotic sleep. The swaying of the bus as it moved was a soothing sleeping pill that made me close my eyelids and enter the land of dreams once again.
I am again in this place of whitish walls and cylindrical columns that match the modern architecture of the building. I was looking at many papers lying around as if in an apocalypse of disorder, I was focusing again on the woman who was crying desperately for me, her tears falling on my face a little aged by time and resting on the brown and sweaty skin.
Meanwhile, I could feel the terrible pain intensifying inside me. My breathing became more ragged and I felt my breath leaving my body. Cold sweat was running down my forehead, I seemed to be in agony.
The wavy-haired woman pressed me to her chest and continued to cry inconsolably, bathing me with her salty tears of pain. I continued to contemplate her in silence and then I felt an anguish that overwhelmed me, reaching every corner of my existence.
I was trapped in that wounded body, without escape, without hope of seeing a new sun, and with the great sorrow of never seeing that sublime face again. She kept hugging me in a vain effort to keep me in this finite world.
My mouth expelled the vital liquid, and then I saw a masked man arrive and place a gun on her head, then strange sounds invaded the place and I woke up at the abrupt stop of the bus. Again I returned to my reality and hurriedly grabbed my briefcase, got out of the vehicle, and when I got off I found myself in the great concrete jungle. The large buildings blocked the sun's rays, and the shadows invaded the cold concrete structures.
People as cold as those structures, passed by me lost in their routine without time, always running towards life lost in their obligations. I tried to ask for the address I had written on the crumpled paper, but everything was in vain, those people just came and went.
Then I decided to look for a place by my own means. I felt like I was in a labyrinth and with the anguish of missing my work appointment. When I turned a corner at full speed I stumbled and fell backward to the ground, with my blood boiling inside me I got up and started to claim with euphoria, when I looked closely I saw that it was a girl.
She was wearing that flowered dress and when she lifted her face, I could not believe it, it was her: the woman of my dreams. My tension was dropping and she gave me a beautiful smile, she stood up. "Sorry I didn't see where you were coming from, hehe..."
"It's my fault, I'm looking for an address, I'm in a hurry and I didn't notice. I'm sorry. I'm Eduardo, nice to meet you." I extended my hand to the girl to help her up.
"My name is Leticia, the pleasure is mine and tell me what address you are looking for. I can help you." A smile like radiant sunshine was visible at the corner of her lips.
After giving her the paper she guided me to the place, on the way we got to know each other and began to feel empathy for each other, we arrived at the bank 'The Capital', we entered and the place was very familiar to me. I could not believe it, it was the place of my dreams. I presented my papers to the guard who guided us to the manager's office.
"Well, Eduardo, I think I should leave you, it was nice meeting you, good luck in your interview." She winked at me flirtatiously and sensually then turned around looking for the exit.
"Wait, Leticia!" I said as I came out of the spell of her gaze.
At that moment, the guard came out of the office telling me to enter, then some armed men entered the bank pointing their guns. The guard pulled out his revolver and fired, the robbers fired back and I was seriously wounded.
My dream came true like in a movie, everything became chaotic and terrifying. Leticia was running towards me and I had a flashback of memories of that dream. I could not believe it my dream was now reality and I could do nothing to change it.
At that moment, the masked man was approaching Leticia who was crying inconsolably. I remembered the dream and could only scream, "Don't do it!"
Then shots rang out, I closed my eyes and felt Leticia's body on top of mine, I thought the worst, I opened my eyes and saw Leticia on top of me covering me from the bullets, she was looking at me and saying, "Everything will be ok"
After several hours the police took the bank and released us. I was immediately taken to a hospital where I underwent emergency surgery, after a few days, I had been saved by a miracle, and there she was, the woman of my dreams, who had saved me. She approached me and gave me a big kiss, there I knew that the dream did not foretell a tragedy, but a great love that was born of the improbable.
The end
La premonición
Miraba una mujer correr hacia mí, sus lágrimas fluían por las cuencas de sus ojos, su boca carmesí expulsaba gritos de desesperación, su pelo negro y ondeado se mecía ante la brisa veraniega y su vestido rojo con flores estampadas, que le llegaba hasta la rodilla volaba con cada paso que daba.
Todo parecía ir en cámara lenta, el dolor se sentía en cada sollozo exhalado por las paredes de ese lugar. Su rostro tan bello y sus rasgos finos y simétricos denotaban familiaridad. Llegaba hasta mí y me tomaba en sus brazos, yo me miraba cubierto de sangre y luego un gran dolor estrujaba mi pecho.
El sonido rimbombante del despertador me hacía volver en sí, abría los ojos sobresaltado y miraba la hora, se me hacía tarde para mi cita de trabajo. Tomé mi ropa, mientras el reloj marcaba su paso incansable, la hora señalada parecía llegar implacable y sin demoras.
Salí masticando con prisa el pan que sobró de la noche anterior. El sol empezaba su recorrido meridiano y algunas aves pasaban bailoteando en el firmamento azul. Corría presuroso por la acera agrietada y la basura flotaba con la brisa cíclica de la mañana.
Tomaba el bus para que me llevase a la cita hecha con antelación, de eso dependía mi futuro en aquella ciudad después de haber dejado mi pueblo y a mi familia. Nada había sido fácil desde aquel entonces tuve que luchar duro para conseguir el sueño de realizarme como profesional y conseguir un trabajo bien remunerado. Esta ocasión era la indicada para conseguir lo que tanto me había costado.
Ya en el bus, el olor a ambientador frutal barato se posó en mis fosas nasales y se infiltro hasta mi mente, que me llevaba a caer en un sueño hipnótico. El vaivén del bus mientras se movía fue un relajante somnífero que me hacía cerrar los párpados y adentrarme una vez más en el país de los sueños.
Estoy de nuevo en este lugar de paredes blanquecinas y columnas cilíndricas que hacían juego con la arquitectura moderna del edificio. Miraba muchos papeles tirados como en un apocalipsis de desorden, me volvía a enfocar en la mujer que lloraba desesperada por mí, sus lágrimas caían en mi rostro un poco envejecido por el tiempo y se posaban en la piel morena y sudorosa.
En tanto, yo podía sentir el terrible dolor que se intensificaba dentro de mí. La respiración se me hacía más atropellada y sentía que mi aliento abandonaba el cuerpo. El sudor frío recorría mi frente, parecía que agonizaba.
La mujer de pelo ondulado me apretaba en su pecho y seguía llorando desconsoladamente, bañándome con sus lágrimas salinas de dolor. Yo seguía contemplándola en silencio y luego sentía una angustia que me sobrecogía, llegándome a cada rincón de mi existencia.
Estaba atrapado en ese cuerpo herido, sin escapatoria, sin esperanza de ver un nuevo sol y con la gran pena de no volver a ver ese rostro tan sublime. Ella no dejaba de abrazarme en un vano esfuerzo por retenerme en este mundo finito.
Mi boca expulsaba el líquido vital, luego miré llegar a un enmascarado y colocar un arma en la cabeza de ella, luego sonidos estrafalarios invadieron el lugar y desperté ante el brusco detener del bus. Nuevamente volví a mi realidad y tome mi maletín apresuradamente, salí del vehículo, al bajar me encontré con la gran jungla de cemento. Los grandes edificios tapaban los rayos solares, y las sombras invadían las frías estructuras de hormigón.
La gente tan fría como esas estructuras, pasaban a mi lado pérdidas en su rutina sin tiempo, siempre corriendo hacia la vida perdida por las obligaciones. Trataba de preguntar por la dirección que tenía escrita en el papel arrugado, todo era en vano, aquellas personas solo iban y venían.
Luego decidí buscar por mis propios medios el lugar señalando. Sentía que me encontraba en un laberinto y con la angustia de perder la cita de trabajo. Al doblar una esquina a toda velocidad tropecé y caí de espaldas hacia el suelo, con la sangre hirviendo en mi interior me levanté y empecé a reclamar con euforia, al mirar con detenimiento vi que era a una chica.
Ella lucía aquel vestido de flores y al levantar su rostro, no podía creerlo, era ella: la mujer de mis sueños. Mi tensión bajaba y ella me regaló una bella sonrisa, se levantó. «Disculpa no vi por dónde venías, jeje...».
«La culpa es mía, estoy buscando una dirección, voy de prisa y no me di cuenta. Perdón. Soy Eduardo, mucho gusto». Le extendí la mano a la chica para ayudarla a levantar.
«Me llamo Leticia, el gusto es mío y dime qué dirección buscas. Te puedo ayudar». Una sonrisa como el sol radiante se dejaba ver en la comisura de sus labios.
Luego de darle el papel ella me guío hasta el lugar, en ese trayecto nos fuimos conociendo y empezamos a sentir empatía el uno por el otro, llegamos al banco "El Capital", entramos y el lugar me resultó muy conocido. No podía creerlo, era el lugar de mis sueños. Presente mis papeles al celador quien nos guío hasta la oficina del gerente.
«Bueno, Eduardo, creo que te debo dejar, fue un gusto conocerte, suerte en tu entrevista». Me guiño el ojo con coquetería y sensualidad luego se dio media vuelta buscando la salida.
«¡Espera, Leticia!», le dije mientras salía del embrujo de su mirada.
En ese momento, salió el celador de la oficina haciéndome una señal para que entrara, luego de eso hombres armados entraban al banco apuntando con sus armas. El celador sacaba su revólver y disparó, los ladrones respondieron el fuego hacia donde yo estaba y caí mal herido.
Mi sueño se hacía realidad como en una película, todo se volvió caótico y aterrador. Leticia corría hacia mí y tuve un flashback de recuerdos de ese sueño. No podía creerlo mi sueño ahora era realidad y no podía hacer nada para cambiarlo.
En ese momento, el enmascarado se acercaba a Leticia quien lloraba desconsolada. Recordé el sueño y solo pude gritar, «¡No lo hagas!».
Luego se escucharon disparos cerré los ojos y sentí el cuerpo de Leticia sobre el mío, pensé lo peor, abrí mis ojos y vi a Leticia encima mío cubriéndome de las balas, me miraba y me decía, «Todo saldrá bien».
Después de varias horas la policía tomó el banco y nos liberaba. Inmediatamente fui conducido a un hospital donde me operaron de urgencia, luego de unos días, me había salvado de milagro y ahí estaba ella, la mujer de mis sueños, quien me había salvado. Se acercó a mí y me dio un gran beso, ahí supe que el sueño no pronosticaba una tragedia, sino un gran amor que nació de lo inverosímil.
Fin
Edited by Rincón Poético.
Text authored by:
Camilo Torres
DRA
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The natator's troubled visions or dreams were actually pointers to what he was going to experience in real life later. It was with great joy that he witnessed the materialising of his precognitive experiences in the form of the woman of his dreams (pun intended), Leticia. From that moment on their lives together is only pleasant. The narrator's joy at meeting Leticia is likely combined with surprise at the discovery of the precognitive powers he possesses.
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Thank you for stopping by and leaving your comment, he really has a very special gift. At least the experience helped him find love.
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your story is very good. I congratulate you because through that dream, you knew true love. Have a happy day.
Thank you for stopping by and leaving your kind comment. Great love was born from tragedy, one never knows what awaits us in life.
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Intense, exciting and well structured story. The outcome is particularly unexpected because you lead the reader to expect the worst. You’ve timed and paced this piece perfectly to leave the reader with a grin on their face. Nicely done!
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Your story has been selected as one of the best of the week. It's part of the 132nd Featured Authors Magazine.1
Always an honor and happiness that you take my stories into account.
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