RE: DISEMBODIED VISITORS [EN/ES]
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Wow, what a gripping story! The atmosphere you created is so eerie and compelling, and I love how the attic, a seemingly mundane place, becomes the catalyst for uncovering such a deep and unsettling family secret. The twist about the grandfather and the disembodied beings was completely unexpected and added an incredible layer to the narrative.
The way you portrayed the grandmother as both pragmatic and deeply affected by what happened really adds emotional depth. It's amazing how she lived with that secret for so long. The story kept me hooked from beginning to end, and I'm left wanting to know even more about those disembodied beings and their intentions.
Your writing style brings out the suspense perfectly, and the ending leaves readers with so many questions in the best way. I’d love to see more of this eerie world you've hinted at—maybe even more about how the grandmother dealt with the aftermath or about the origins of these beings. Great work!
When I finished writing this story I knew there was content to develop other stories. Respecting the truth, all the ingredients of the plot served specifically when I was writing it. I had never thought of them before.
The grandmother was a character I really enjoyed writing. Her practical sense of life does not make her lose her sensitivity. Her decision was made out of love, otherwise she would lose her loved one very early on.
The secret is justified by society's incomprehension of what does not fit into the established canons. Who would believe her?
I enjoyed your commentary very much. The exchange of ideas that is created between the author and the reader is always enriching.
I will seriously think about returning to the theme and developing the subplots that allow it. Thank you for your suggestion.
Thank you very much for reading and many more for your comment. 👍